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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is said that there
are
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the
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 significant number of
people
 who suffer from diseases
such
 as diabetes and high
cholesterols
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which is mainly caused by eating much fast
food
.
Therefore
, they think that governments should increase tax
in
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this
food
 type. In my opinion,
i
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 have
agree
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 with it and
i
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 will explain in
next
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 paragraphs. Some
people
 argue that they should have their own eating choice whether it is good or not. Indeed, it is undeniable that fast
food
 is the cheapest and the most
convenience
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 choice when you are hungry.
For example
, we spend money
for
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Hamburger
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 less
that
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 have
a
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lunch in
restuarant
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restaurant
. In fact,
someone
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do
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 not have much time to cook by themselves.
Then
, fast
food
 is always their effective choice to buy. In
this
 case, some
people
 support that
this
 kind of
food
 should be affordable for everyone who
do
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 not have many choices.
On the other hand
. Charging tax for fast
food
 has several positive views in terms of making citizens get healthier.
First
, it will bring alternative healthy
food
 up over the town. There are many local and affordable healthy
food
 shops which are beaten by
fast
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fast-food
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food
 chains.
This
 will drive
people
 to try to
chooes
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choose
 other
food
 which is healthy
to
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 their body. In
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addition
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addiction
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addition
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,
fastfood
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fast food
 production will
reorganised
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 their
food
 better
such
 as reducing frozen
food
 and using healthy oil for
deep-fried
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 process. These solutions will take
people
 to eat better and get healthier, indeed. To
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summerize
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, even everyone should design what they should eat depending on prices and time, It is clear that there are many effective sides making
citizen
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citizens
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 in the country have a healthy eating
habit
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habits
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. So,
i
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 think
government
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the government
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 should impose a higher tax
in
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on
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 fast
food
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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