In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is said that there
are
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the
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significant number of
people
who suffer from diseases
such
as diabetes and high
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which is mainly caused by eating much fast
food
.
Therefore
, they think that governments should increase tax
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this
food
type. In my opinion,
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have
agree
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with it and
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will explain in
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paragraphs. Some
people
argue that they should have their own eating choice whether it is good or not. Indeed, it is undeniable that fast
food
is the cheapest and the most
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choice when you are hungry.
For example
, we spend money
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Hamburger
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less
that
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have
a
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lunch in
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do
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not have much time to cook by themselves.
Then
, fast
food
is always their effective choice to buy. In
this
case, some
people
support that
this
kind of
food
should be affordable for everyone who
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not have many choices.
On the other hand
. Charging tax for fast
food
has several positive views in terms of making citizens get healthier.
First
, it will bring alternative healthy
food
up over the town. There are many local and affordable healthy
food
shops which are beaten by
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food
chains.
This
will drive
people
to try to
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choose
other
food
which is healthy
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their body. In
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addiction
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,
fastfood
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production will
reorganised
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their
food
better
such
as reducing frozen
food
and using healthy oil for
deep-fried
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process. These solutions will take
people
to eat better and get healthier, indeed. To
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, even everyone should design what they should eat depending on prices and time, It is clear that there are many effective sides making
citizen
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in the country have a healthy eating
habit
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. So,
i
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think
government
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should impose a higher tax
in
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fast
food
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • obesity
  • diabetes
  • heart disease
  • health outcomes
  • healthcare costs
  • consumer behavior
  • socio-economic backgrounds
  • ethical implications
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies
  • regulations
  • nutritional content
  • healthier food options
  • government intervention
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