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I possess a Registered Nursing certificate from Nigeria with a degree in Bachelor of Nursing Science. I started working as a
nurse
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 in my final year after passing my board exam. After graduation, I proceeded to do the compulsory one-year internship program for graduate
nurses
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 in my country. I interned with Federal Medical Centre, Yenagoa under the Ministry of
Health
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, Bayelsa state. During my time as an intern
nurse
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, I reported to the
Nurse
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-in-charge of each ward I was posted to, I taught and supervised student
nurses
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 who came for clinical posting.
Experience
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 I have about two years
experience
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 of working in challenging and work-intensive healthcare environments. I've worked in 36bedded medical and surgical wards, I've
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 worked in pediatric wards, hospitals and special
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 babies units. During
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 period, I was in charge of the ward a few times,which involved prioritizing the
care
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 of patients, delegating to other
nurses
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,
health
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care
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 assistants and student
nurses
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. I have had to deal with various situations
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 during a case of hypoglycemia in a preteen which was resolved successfully.I have an excellent relationship with the wider
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care
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 team including medical teams, physiotherapists and occupational therapists. I
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 have
experience
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 in planning and organizing patient discharges, coordinating take-home medications and arranging for transportation home. My
experience
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 has enabled me to maintain clinical
skills
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 in many areas including medicine management (administering parenteral and enteral medications), wound management, monitoring of blood glucose levels, the use of nursing process and
care
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 plan to carry out procedures for optimum
care
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. Knowledge,
Skills
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 and Understanding I believe I have excellent communication
skills
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 and have always been able to handle challenging situations. On one occasion at my current job, when I had to deal sensitively with a patient who was upset about his present treatment regimen and how he doesn't feel better even after seeing the medical team. I went up to the patient's bedside, listened to him verbalise his concerns; after which I counselled and reassured him
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 team for a review of his treatment regimen. After a few days, he thanked me immensely. I am actively involved in preventive medicine by teaching patients to adopt healthier lifestyles
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 as smoking cessation, reducing alcohol intake, regular hospital checks and exercise. I do
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 during clinic days through
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 talks.I am committed to continuing professional development and have attended a few workshops and conferences on continuing education in the nursing profession. Personal Qualities I believe that I am a compassionate, caring, courageous, competent at rendering nursing
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 and confident
nurse
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 who is approachable at all times. I try to be respectful towards all individuals from different backgrounds. I have
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 working in a private hospital where communication is a key skill,
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 to support clients/patients from all works of life. Teamwork is a skill I already have and exhibit at my present place of employment. I have sat for and passed my IELTS and CBT exams, awaiting my decision letter from NMC UK.
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