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Large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, people gravitate towards buying their products. What problems does this cause? What could be done to encourage people to buy local products?

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To promote the business one of the major factors is an advertisement.Multinational companies have a large number of funds available to spend on promotional adverts,
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 can lead the public to fall in their attraction to buy the brand
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 of buying local merchandise.
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 may cause serious problems in the local field
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 as closing the shops and unemployment. International brands trying to expand the worldwide business by offering big discounts on household production, easily attract customers ,especially women.
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,companies are getting benefits rather than buyers.As a consequence, many small local associations run out of business, and it can make thousands of people unemployed.
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, the dominance of international clothing and fashion brands had swept away many local businesses in many Asian countries, including mine, and money spent on advertisement played a big role here. To encourage people to purchase local commodities some measures should be taken into account. The government should strictly monitor and ban advertisements from the mass media.
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, people should compare product quality before purchasing from shops, and the shop owners should be encouraged to shelf local products along with the branded work.
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, authorities should rate and review any product and disclose it to the public.
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, local product manufacturers should be financially supported by the banks and the government as they are helpful for the economic progress of a country. In conclusion,no doubt large-scale companies can have many negative effects that can damage the local market and economy in the country.A solution to
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 problem local markets
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 should start promoting their brands to reach customers by using local media.
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