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Some people say that having a lot of TV channels is good, while others argue that it reduces the quality of programs. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In present-day society,
TV
 production has reached its maximum renewal, but still, there is a debate about whether it is so normal or exaggerated. One part of society believes that generating more and more
TV
channels
 is entertaining, while others prefer quality over quantity.
This
 essay will briefly discuss both sides and give my thought. On the one hand, the sphere of television is not only one of the significant factors in development, but
also
 an indicator of civilization. A huge superiority of the variations of different
channels
 is that absolutely every human can enjoy a picture that he finds captivating.
Moreover
, we learn a lot from
TV
, including local news, facts from wildlife programs or maybe a talk show about the success of a famous singer and so on.
For example
, in the children's channel “Balapan” there are educative cartoons and films in the Kazakh language around the clock, while on the “Turan” channel you can visit another corner of the planet without getting up from the sofa.
On the other hand
, seeing the same picture quickly gets boring. It would be splendid if these programs were entertaining and intellectual, but
instead
, all of them are in the same type and vice versa negatively affect the brain, thereby impairing the ability of critical thinking and memory.
This
 can be seen by the fact that
channels
 that do not carry much meaning,
for example
, videos borrowed from mobile entertainment applications, are gaining the most viewers. Taking everything into account, it is convenient for someone when there is a large choice of
channels
, especially by a frequent
TV
 viewer,
however
, sometimes an excessive number of them is not fascinating. In my opinion, each channel should have its uniqueness and producers should take
this
 into account.
Submitted by zhadyra.serikbayeva2016 on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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