The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last twenty years. many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.

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In the past,
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in each area on the earth were set in terms of prioritized orders. The higher-level people,the loyal family, have more priority than the lower,the farmer.
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, diversities of society
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as colours of skin, sexes, and outlook are discriminated against widely, so
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community would like to do as sexism,racism, and so on have seen so far.
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were treated unequally because they were stereotyped as weak, chore people, uneducated people. Human rights and sex equality in the present are taught as well as the position of
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is prioritized more.
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, many problems arise.
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,children are not raised properly because of lacking time for
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. The
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for now have equality like
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. They should have the right to do things that fellow are able to do.
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, many occupations require only guy employees, as well as the ability of some
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,
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are preferable. Many problems are managed better by the
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due to their thinking and experience. In the several positions, many experts are
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who drive the company in the directions
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as scientists, CEOs, singers, writers and so on.  Some always think that the position of woman is only doing chores, raising kids and sewing clothes, the woman things. The sets of thinking are quite obsoleted. Chores or house working are done by everybody in the house, either
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or
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. Raising children as the best result is a cooperation between both dad and mom. If kids were taught the only mon , they would not know knowledge from one position.
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have the authority to do work and anything else they want. Meanwhile,
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should help to raise their children.
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is not the problem of
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these days. In conclusion, Human rights and sex equality are necessary as the basis of living nowadays. Either
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or
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have the right to do anything they want. Sex should not be the limit. The abilities should be determined
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. Avoiding raising kids is not the problem of
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but the problem of society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • evolution
  • domestic roles
  • diverse professional engagements
  • dual-working parents
  • family dynamics
  • juvenile delinquency
  • societal and economic factors
  • dual-income households
  • childcare methods
  • community support systems
  • gender roles
  • family responsibilities
  • professional aspirations
  • development needs
  • correlation
  • simplistic causation
  • workplace policies
  • flexible hours
  • parental leave
  • gender equality
  • role models
  • successful womanhood
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