By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

from the ,beginning human civilization has faced many challenges
such
as lawlessness which remain a headache for rulers and now for governments of the world. offender posed a serious threat to our society despite existing punishments like life imprisonment or execution by hanging . lawlessness rate is increased there are no signs of reduction.
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completely disagree that
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death
penalty is an appropriate form of punishment that seems to work to control crime. the offender must be punished with life imprisonment if they commit heinous crimes.we
also
need to channelize them into mainstream communities even though they are considered culprits. the reason for crime should be identified why they have to take
such
an extreme step. in most of the cases the reason was drugs, unemployment and mental health issues there are a number of cases where crime unintentionally has done something under the effect of drugs. to tackle
such
a situation collective effort is needed in which civil community and religious preachers should be involved to play a constructive role. the
death
penalty is no more a serious punishment for culprits
for example
in the capital of India a girl was raped by a group of men on a bus, in fact, she was gone through brutal sexual assault and later died in hospital . when the journalist asked one of the accused why they have done
this
do they feel guilty? he said even if they hang me
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will do it again if
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was released. here we can completely understand there is no fear of
death
in culprit minds. community is
also
considered about offenders because they ask for execution to
death
which is an unjustified approach. society is in favour of eliminating
such
elements forever to avoid
further
crimes but punishment itself failed to support law where offenders have seen killing innocent people. the demand for justice rises and under the pressure of society judges allow execution by hanging to set an example for others. in ,
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conclusion I strongly oppose the
death
penalty we need to find other ways like a social boycott for those who commit
such
heinous wrongdoing. they should be excluded from govt beneficiary schemes and life imprisonment should be given where is no hope to change the mind of criminal is seen.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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