In some countries, people buy clothes and choose hairstyles according to the latest fashion. Why is this happening? Is this a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, many
people
buy clothes and make hairdos according to the latest
fashion
and it's obvious that
this
is an increasing tendency. More and more
people
become
fashion
addicted and try to follow the latest trends. Why is it happening? Well, I have
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tree
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main points.
First
of all, we live in
the
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world that develops rapidly.
Thus
,
people
gain new opportunities.
Consequently
, wages increase and
market
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provides us with a wide range of offers, so everyone can purchase clothes they want to wear. Everybody can make themselves look like they want to.
Secondly
, we live in an information society, which means that modern
people
receives
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tons of info
everyday
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. Social media plays one of the leading roles in everyday routine. Young adults follow influencers and try to come up with their idols. They take them as examples, but
that is
not always good. Personally, I think that each individual should have their own unique style and appearance. I don't like when
people
try to copy someone because it erases identity.
Furthermore
,
people
start looking similar like in a kind of dystopia where you cannot express yourself as a person. For
this
reason
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I don't really like to follow the latest
fashion
. And the
last
, but not least. I guess
fashion
might be a method of escaping from problems or relaxation.
For instance
, I feel great after the beauty salon. I believe that changing
of
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the hairstyle can be a kind of a cure for those who are upset. Frankly speaking, shopping is quite stressful for me, but
i
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am convinced there are
people
who enjoy buying things and it's a kind of
a
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treatment for them. Especially when we get so much stress
everyday
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. In a nutshell, I want to say that buying fashionable clothes or making stylish haircuts is rather a positive development, but we should keep our uniqueness.
Otherwise
, everybody would look similar which is not interesting at all. I wholeheartedly believe that you can consider yourself as a dressed to dazzle,
flawless
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person even if you do not follow
fashion
trends, but developed a sense of style.
That is
the essence of
fashion
.
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