In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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who
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to travel before their university years is consistently on
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the
rise. Even some young people prefer to
work
not only full-time
work
but
also
part-time
work
. The argument that
children
will be encouraged to
work
or travel is an argument
that is
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with by many. The two
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of
this
argument will be thoroughly analysed and
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in
this
essay before drawing a reasoned conclusion.
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, there many advantages
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children
who are encouraged to travel. Yong people have more inspections that can not find from the tiny classroom between gap year.
For instance
,
new
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environment and
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place are the main reason that
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children
learn new
culture
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and have more experience to become adults. They learn how to adapt to
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new people and know the real world that they never believe
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.
However
, it is
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of time to have a gap year.
Children
can get ready to be
university
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student
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.
Secondly
, making money and knowing more experience
were
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made up by working before going to university
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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