In many countries, women no longer feel the feel need to get married. Some believe that this is because women abale to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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the rate of single
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prove that not having authority
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women
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a good a position high job or education without
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can be concentrated  on their work and  to get more
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their situation . one other hand,  the plenty  of
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have many problem
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about their security even will be killed by
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about their possess and money or other
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, having a good  partner and get married carefully can
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more
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woman need to positive man. sum to
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today's
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cussfully about tax and other own and having good cooperation cab be made certain great future.
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