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Film stars and celebrities often share their views on public matters that have little to do with their profession. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Recently the issue has been brought into focus. Nowadays, it is common to see
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 in their lives speaking about almost everything that may not be related to their career and profession and have created a great impact on their admirers. I believe that it is a negative and positive development. In the following paragraphs, I will propagate my views on
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 phenomenon. We may mention the indisputable fact that film
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 famous
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 take advantage of their influence to gain
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's trust, making
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 believe and follow them to advertise untrue products.
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, in Vietnam, there are many famous
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 selling live streams of products
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 as medicine and functional foods everywhere, of unknown origin. Has negative effects on users and affects human health.
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 issue has had the intervention of state agencies, these actions cannot be prevented. Everyone needs to take preventive measures to avoid encountering bad cases like
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 again. Another special consideration in
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 case is that there are still beautiful stories that
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 bring. They use their fame to spread good messages in life. Because they have
influence
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 on many social networking platforms. That influence can spread to
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 so they can act
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.
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, during the recent floods in the Central region,
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 posted propaganda information calling on
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 to donate rice, food, and support
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 during the floods, and
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 they received a lot of money. money and food from sponsors and
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 across the country.
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 these good deeds, there are still cases of stealing money to put into one's own account. These problems should be overcome and resolved once and for all . In summary, it is important movie
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 and celebrities must be more careful when sharing their opinions on public issues that have little to do with their profession.

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