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Some people belive that government should spend money on important things than arts such as painting and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is believed by a lot of individuals that authorities should allocate money for the things that are essential
instead
 of artistic fields like painting and music. I agree with
this
 given notion as it not only going to be beneficial for people's health but
also
 economic benefit of
nation
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 The paramount factor why government Monty should
goes
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 for important things
is have
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 their fit citizens. Because of the lack of proper health care facilities and easy accessibility
of
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them
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, a number of people issues have been faced by most of the citizens. And if
this
 is going to spend on work of
artistic
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 work
then
 it would be
bit
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 unfair as it is the basic need that every people can access amenities that are related to health.
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, almost 6 children got died before
born
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 every minute just because
her
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 mother does not have access to hospitals nearby, according to a survey conducted in the USA in 2010.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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