The responsibility of bringing up children should be shared equally between father and mother

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Father
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and
mother
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are the supporting pillars for the
child
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, both have the responsibility of raising their offspring equally between them. In my opinion,
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have
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responsibility but a
mother
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is behind every
child
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because she spends more
time
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with her kids as compared to
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father
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a father
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.
His
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frequent
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with the job and other outdoor activities, he does stay home all hour with children.
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, toddlers’
personality
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personalities
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raised
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with both. In many
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a
child
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needs
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father’s
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a father’s
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support for taking decisions. Since mothers are always with them while cooking food and giving ethics, helping in studies and more. So,
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mother
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the mother
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spend
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more
time
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with kids
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then
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the
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father
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.
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, from
birth
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of a baby
mother
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teaches a kid
on
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how to walk, eat, way of thinking and good manners,
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improves toddler personality. It is the
father
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’s duty to support his
child
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in making decisions for
future
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and give positive thinking in life.
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, if
teenager
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a teenager
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needs
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a dad’s
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advice on choosing
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path
than
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father
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the father
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as a parent needs to step up and guide
in
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a soft tone and sensible manner. As it will plan an important role in the
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upbringing
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up bringing
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upbringing
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of the teen. The soft teen touches mind and heart and they will remember
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for the rest of their life and for mental stability. To conclude, children
up bringing
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upbringing
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is one of the main parts in developing their personality. It is the need of
time
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that parents should equally divide the duties and help the
child
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to grow.
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