Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages?

It is often argued that
people
should not pay for entry to
museums
and other expeditions whereas other
people
think we need to spend
money
on fees.
This
essay will discuss why spending
money
on entrance fees has more benefits than not charging. On the one hand,
art
or other works is an idea of other
people
that do not belong to us. We need to respect and not devalue other works. Almost all
artist
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works are represented in
art
galleries or
museums
and we can support them by paying the fees for entry because they
also
earn the
money
from our support. As well as they have encouraged and inspired
to
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improve and produce new workpieces.
For instance
, Thailand has lots of contemporary
art
museums
where teenagers prefer to hang out with their friends and they always buy the ticket for entrance,
then
the artist can produce incredible artworks.
On the other hand
, every place needs
money
for maintenance. The owner has to expend the fund on developing and maintaining costs
such
as cleaning the floor and
art
pieces, guards for looking after
people
and workpieces.
For example
, the owner of the contemporary
art
museum "Jitti" in Thailand revealed the information that she must pay the electrical cost and
also
buy workpieces that are extremely expensive from famous artists.
However
, Even if it is not business
museums
or galleries
such
as local
museums
which
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accumulate a lot of antiques. The government should allow everyone to enter and do not have any extra charges because they use our tax to maintain them. In conclusion, some public or local
museums
should not gather
money
from
people
.
However
, the business
museums
and
art
expedition places that acquire the
money
from
people
have advantages that outweigh the drawbacks because they are used for enhancing and maintaining places and artists.
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