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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some public believe that convenience
food
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 will replace
a traditional
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traditional meals
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meals
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 in the near future as now a day’s public wants to use fast
meals
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 and ready to
cook
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food
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. I don’t agree with
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 statement and I will give reasons for my disagreement in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, in
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 modern ,society many families are converted from joint families to nuclear families with single parents so due to
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 limitations they prefer to use ready to
cook
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 or tanned foods. In earlier days, in a joint ,family one person was dedicated to cooking traditional cuisine by taking their own long
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. But now
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 day’s public doesn’t have enough
time
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 to
cook
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 traditional cuisine.
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, earlier there was only one earning person in the family but now due to rising inflation both husband and wife are earning and working women don’t have enough
time
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 to
cook
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 full course meal so she mostly prefers ready to
cook
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food
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 or fast
food
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. But now a day’s people are
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 more concerned about their health specifically after the pandemic. Yes packed foods are easy and less
time
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 consuming to
cook
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 but they are not healthy. They are the sole reason for obesity and many health problems. People have the misconception that traditional
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 is
time
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-consuming ,
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 there are many ways to
cook
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a healthy
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healthy meals
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meals
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 quickly. Many
food
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 lovers post videos of how to
cook
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 healthy
food
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 in a fast and easy manner. Old folks and youngsters are getting inspired by the weight loss stories of many individuals which eventually inspired them to eat
a healthy
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healthy meals
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meals
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. In conclusion, Even if today’s modern society has less
time
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 to
cook
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 they prefer healthy
meals
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. Because health is wealth in any era and it will always be. So even if the conventional meal is convenient and fast to
cook
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 but public will always consider traditional healthy
food
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. Even now cooking lovers have found many ways to
cook
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 fast
food
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 in traditional ways. So traditional cooking can never be replaced.
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