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Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of​ time and money. ​ Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #waste #of​ #time #money
It is every
persons
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person's
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 dream to travel around the
world
. Spending a lot of
money
 on sightseeing and vacations around the
world
 has become one of the favourite pastimes for most
people
.
Although
 some
people
 think that it is a waste of
money
, I think that experience gotten from travelling is worth the spent
money
. Some
people
 prefer to not spend
money
 on travelling because they believe that it
a
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is a
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big loss to spend
money
 and time on
trips
. Nowadays, with the use of the internet,
people
 can view photos of various attractions of the
world
 at home without spending lots of
money
 on
trips
 abroad. Two years ago, when my family invited
neighbors
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neighbours
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 to travel to Europe for 10 days, they decided to not go,
although
 they had enough
money
 for it. Later, we could see that the
money
 they saved was used to buy some goods for their house. Travelling is an invaluable experience. By going on
trips
,
people
 can broaden their
mind
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minds
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 and horizon. It provides
travelers
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travellers
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 to experience the culture of different nations and fun in the various places of the
world
.
Furthermore
, travelling around the
world
 allows
to
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one to
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 truly relax from the daily routine. For
this
 reason, my family goes
to
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on
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trips
 at least once per year, as sitting at home would not provide the same emotions. To sum up, staying in the homeland certainly has
their
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its
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 advantages, but travelling gives more enjoyment for
people
. While it is true that
people
 can be entertained at their home, I strongly believe that the best way to enjoy is travelling.
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