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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 the past or not can be debatable.
This
 essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and provide evidence as to why
history
 is important
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information information
 to learn about human life. To beginning with, the
history
 from the past can not reliable because in every country have their own
history
 which means the
history
 is not 100 per cent correct and no one can prove it.
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, the
information
 from the past
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can't be justified so you can't believe it.
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 the other hand, we still learn about
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history
 and it's a significant priority to study in a basic high school and a lot of people has attention to it. Some of
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 and evolution of the new things has come from past
information
such
 as we are breakthrough the medical
information
 and adapted it to make new medical research for a new generation. To sum up, even the
information
 about all of the
history
 can not be correct but at least we have known our past and it's a better way to understand from the mistake or basis
information
 to develop our life much better.
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