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Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less time with their parents.what is the reason for this?what problem can this cause?

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this
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 present world,work is the most important part of our life because money is an important role for their
children
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. The number of families
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 both mom and dad working is constantly on a rise. So,
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 can not keep in touch with
children
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 and
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 ,
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young
 people get
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 effects. The reason and cause will be thoroughly analysed and explained in
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 essay before drawing a reasoned conclusion. To start with, there are
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 reasons why
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 spend their total
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 working. The main reason is money for
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' fundamentals
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.
Education
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 has become
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 huge important factor for our life who want to have high
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 not only need talent but
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' finance.
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, nowadays, the top-10 high school always cost high payments approximately 100000 baths per term.
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 means If
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 work hard, they can make sure that their young people will get the best
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 and
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 get a higher chance to have a good salary in the future. Another point to consider is cause for
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. Absolutely no family want to spend less
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 with their
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 but they can not choose. The large problem for young ages is health problems
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 as depression.
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,
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 do not have
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 for
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then
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 they can not notice
kids
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 feeling. Sometimes they never before that their child sick.
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children'
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children
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 feel very sensitive so they can feel bad
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 and down. To summarize, the argument concerning the reason and effects that
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 are working the whole
time
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.
Parents
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 have to limit their working
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 and set their plans to have with their
children
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.
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 is the best way to solve all the problems not only for
kids
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 but
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 for
parents
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.

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