In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

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Education

is a very important part of life and

this

should be completed before starting work or a job.

Education

must be an inevitable part of any individual and everyone has the right to complete his or her study. IN the world there are many countries which are developing, and citizens of these countries are not financially stable, in these regions parents generally ask their children to complete their

education

till secondary level as after that they can support financially to the family and can manage the expenses of bigger families.

Therefore

at an early age or after higher or secondary

education

, they were asked to do small jobs, and due to ,that they cannot complete the rest of the

education

they are willing to do. There are few institutions that run skill-based

education

such

as from Bihar one mathematics teacher started one institution, he encouraged financially weak students to crack the Indian institution exam,

this

is the most famous and prestigious exam in India and

to impossible for financial weak candidates, Ram sir from Bihar supported to the poor candidate and they were able to qualify the exam.

Lastly

, due to poor family conditions pupils could not pursue their educational dream but to encourage continuous

education

government has started scholar programs, if students deserve to appear for

further

education

then

the government will bear the cost and their financial institution and some industrialist

also

came forward to support these children to complete their educational dream. Universities should

also

provide supportive and flexible classes options for working candidates and part-time educational institutions should

also

be encouraged so that working candidates can

also

get an

education

whilst supporting their families.

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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

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