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some people think the sense of competition should be encouraged, other believe that children who are taught to cooperate rather than compete more useful adults.

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Now a day everywhere, there is
competition
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 whether in education, sports, job or even in business. Parents are encouraging their kids to do the
competition
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 in school, college or sometimes in job and it is planted in kids minds in
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 a way that they
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 come forward to the race of
competition
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.
Competition
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 is good but it is an inherent part of life if people are chasing and doing a healthy
competition
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,
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 that will be good. For ,example if there is no
competition
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 in the market for products and services
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 the market will not become a developing market and there would not be any marginal improvements, and without changes and modifications,
society
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 will not improve.
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, few parents guide their kids to become co-operative
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 become supportive is good and due to the supportive nature of the people, each and everyone will grow but individuals are not jealous
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 anyone and because of the supportive nature of a member of
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, nobody feels isolated or neglected and due to
cooperation
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 everyone will get the equal opportunities there would not be any kind course, the crime rate of
society
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 will
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 come down and if
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 kind of situation is there
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 good governance would be established.
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, if compare both ideas about
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 and
cooperation
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, I think that little
competition
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, as well as
cooperation
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,
cooperation
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 is
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 required in
society
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 because due to
competition
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 product quality improve and by participation harmony and pleasant atmosphere with governance will lead in
society
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.
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 both the qualities should encourage but not only one quality to the extreme extent.
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