The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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These line charts illustrate the proportion of having electrical appliances and the number of time spent on housework in a country
from
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1920 and 2019. The
percentage
of families that have three different electrical appliances rise in
this
century. The figure for a washing
machine
fluctuated between 40% to 75%. There was a progressive upturn in the proportion of that from 40% to 70% over a span of 40 years between 1920 to 1960 followed by a drop to 64% in 1980.
Subsequently
, the data grew stably to 75%
at the end
of the given period. Moving on to the
percentage
of a
refrigerator
and a
vacuum
cleaner
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, they showed an upward trend in
this
period. The
percentage
of families having a
refrigerator
rise significantly from 0% in 1920 to 100% in 1980 overtaking that of a washing
machine
in 1945. And there was
also
an increase for that with a
vacuum
cleaner from 30% to 100% exceeding that of a washing
machine
in 1960. The number of hours people spent on housework decreased in
this
period. The amount of time dropped significantly from 50 hours to 15% from 1920 to 1980 followed by a significant drop in the
next
40 years.
Overall
, it is clear from the data that the
percentage
of having a washing
machine
,
refrigerator
or
vacuum
cleaner all saw a rise and that hours spent on housework saw a drop. It is
also
striking that every home had a
refrigerator
and
vacuum
cleaner after 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, machine, refrigerator, vacuum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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