In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or mall to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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local venders have been eradicated due to contemporary shopping patterns has been drawn
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complex.
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impact will impose a negative effect on society since
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would lead to unemployment as well as inflation.
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with, prices at shopping malls are
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at higher levels in order to cope with
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. The central reason behind
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is large complex
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been decorated in
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manner for appealing the customers which
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increase the amount of rental, electricity bill and other relevant taxes.
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,
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product has to be sold at
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rate when compared to a local shop.
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, a recent study shows that retailing value of ladies bags in the same brand is twofold in high-rise markets when comparing to small shops;
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nevertheless
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consumers are
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eager
to buy them at high rates.
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, when the demand
decreses
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decreases
, small retailers are in for a hard time, leading
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and
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given
giving
up the business
permenantly
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permanently
. Due to the consumption declining, profit reduces as a repercussion and
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, closes up the available business
opprtunities
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opportunities
. Seen in
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light, smaller sellers and assistants could have
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their positions which would result
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unemployment
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unless
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would address
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.
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, an extensive survey has found that
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every six months at least one local outlet is to be eradicated. To conclude, customers are attracted ever-greater by mall-complex which could undoubtedly result in
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of small business.
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, creating an immense impact on the society ranging from unemployment to price soaring;
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, if the government address the problem correctly by funding or promoting them to choose their path to develop,
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might be solved
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some degree in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic downturn
  • local artisans
  • monopolization
  • cultural homogenization
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • e-commerce
  • proximity shopping
  • urban sprawl
  • retail ecosystem
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