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Some people think that the government should be responsible for improving public health. Others, however, believe that everyone in the community should take part in this issue. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is no argument that improving public
health
 is one of the most important issues that every country should include
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 priorities. Yet time and time again
this
 responsibility is usually placed on the shoulders of the government when in fact it should be each individual who can
also
 take charge of
such
 a fundamental issue. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. It is true to say that governments play an important role in keeping
public
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healthy
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 and being responsible for the general
health
 conditions of their citizens. They should provide a clean environment and efficient
health
 care policy for people.
In addition
, the authorities can maintain the
health
 of the general population by increasing the number of
sport
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 facilities
such
 as parks and open spaces in each community in order to encourage people to exercise more often
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 and leading to the improvement of both public
health
 and individual
health
.
However
, individual
health
 is considered
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a personal matter and the government cannot be the only one to play a major role in improving it.
In other words
, there is nothing that the government could do if an individual has unhealthy habits.
Therefore
, each individual should choose healthy lifestyles and habits
such
 as eating healthy food, having
balanced
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 diet and taking sufficient rest which are major factors to boost
individual’s
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 immunity.
Moreover
, they must consult a doctor regularly or have
annual
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 medical
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 to see if they are physically fit. In conclusion, both governments and individuals have a great impact on improving public
health
. While governments must prioritize and take serious actions on
this
 issue, people should pay more attention
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better care of themselves. Doing so can lead to a healthy community in the present and in the future generation.
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