Some people think that the government should be responsible for improving public health. Others, however, believe that everyone in the community should take part in this issue. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There is no argument that improving public

health

is one of the most important issues that every country should include

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priorities. Yet time and time again

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responsibility is usually placed on the shoulders of the government when in fact it should be each individual who can

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take charge of

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a fundamental issue. In the following paragraphs, both of these viewpoints will be discussed in detail before a conclusion is reached. It is true to say that governments play an important role in keeping

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and being responsible for the general

health

conditions of their citizens. They should provide a clean environment and efficient

health

care policy for people.

In addition

, the authorities can maintain the

health

of the general population by increasing the number of

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facilities

such

as parks and open spaces in each community in order to encourage people to exercise more often

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and leading to the improvement of both public

health

and individual

health

.

However

, individual

health

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a personal matter and the government cannot be the only one to play a major role in improving it.

In other words

, there is nothing that the government could do if an individual has unhealthy habits.

Therefore

, each individual should choose healthy lifestyles and habits

such

as eating healthy food, having

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diet and taking sufficient rest which are major factors to boost

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immunity.

Moreover

, they must consult a doctor regularly or have

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medical

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to see if they are physically fit. In conclusion, both governments and individuals have a great impact on improving public

health

. While governments must prioritize and take serious actions on

this

issue, people should pay more attention

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better care of themselves. Doing so can lead to a healthy community in the present and in the future generation.