Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that trips are a waste of
money
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and
time
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, while others think that it is a significant experience in our life. Yes maybe For
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you need a lot of
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and
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because now the cost of hotels are expensive, so you should be ready to spend them, but in my
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new journeys will give vital knowledge and improve your worldview. For the
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, visiting another place for a journey could really take
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amount of
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if you want to visit another country and to get to know with
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culture, it takes more than 2 weeks and some people think that it is too much and they are not ready to spend that much of their
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.
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,
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could be a big waste of
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, but in some cases
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statement is wrong.
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, I have seen a lot of tv shows where people try to spend only 100$ in 2 days, and it shows that it is possible to travel without spending a lot of cash.
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, visiting new places gives very big and valuable experiences that could change your mind,
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, while
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you will see new places and will expand your horizons of mind and pay attention that
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is the big source of new ideas. The most important thing that gives
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is an emotional experience, your brain will reload and you will see the world from a new perspective. In conclusion, I think that it is better to spend some
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and to upgrade yourself,
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agree that
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is
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but in
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case
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the knowledge and experience that you will get after
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process is worth it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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