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Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people think that trips are a waste of
money
 and
time
, while others think that it is a significant experience in our life. Yes maybe For
traveling
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 you need a lot of
money
 and
time
 because now the cost of hotels are expensive, so you should be ready to spend them, but in my
opinion
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 new journeys will give vital knowledge and improve your worldview. For the
first
, visiting another place for a journey could really take
big
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 amount of
time
,
for
example
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 if you want to visit another country and to get to know with
new
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a new
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 culture, it takes more than 2 weeks and some people think that it is too much and they are not ready to spend that much of their
time
.
Secondly
,
traveling
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 could be a big waste of
money
, but in some cases
this
 statement is wrong.
For example
, I have seen a lot of tv shows where people try to spend only 100$ in 2 days, and it shows that it is possible to travel without spending a lot of cash.
On the other hand
, visiting new places gives very big and valuable experiences that could change your mind,
for instance
, while
traveling
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 you will see new places and will expand your horizons of mind and pay attention that
traveling
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 is the big source of new ideas. The most important thing that gives
traveling
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 is an emotional experience, your brain will reload and you will see the world from a new perspective. In conclusion, I think that it is better to spend some
money
 and to upgrade yourself,
i
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 agree that
time
 is
money
 but in
this
case
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 the knowledge and experience that you will get after
this
 process is worth it.
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  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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