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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that giving longer
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 works the best to decrease
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crime
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the crime
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 rate, whereas others think that better alternative ways are more effective. In my opinion, there are better different ways as
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 types are case by case,
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prison
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 periods can influence
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 decline partly and temporarily. Preventing
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 occurrences in advance can be considered as a priority rather than giving heavy
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 afterwards. Remaly, many cases of repeated
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 occur after heavy punishments
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 as long
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sentences
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 because the
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 hardly could seek opportunities for living out of
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. If the
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 had got vocational training or been given opportunities for their careers in
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, the repeated criminal rate would have been reduced.
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, unintentional
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 due to
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’ ignorance can be avoided by educating citizens with legal knowledge and improving public awareness of everyday
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. These types of
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 cannot disappear if courts give the
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 longer
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sentences
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. Blocking seriously heavy
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 from society for longer periods can contribute to
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 decline. Historically, many
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 as psychopaths in mentally abnormal situations have been addicted to cruel wrongdoings like murder and rape, which deserve to be punished maximally to isolate them as long as possible.
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, there had been no murder occasion in a particular village where women had been found to be killed on the trails, while a person had been prisoned for stealing. Police officers could notice
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 the murderer was based on the circumstances. Without the
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 sentence to the criminal, more women might have become victims of the evil acts. To conclude, there have been the best ways to decrease
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crime
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the crime
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 rate by
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 types. To prevent repeated or unintentional
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, vocational training and public education can be more significant
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 of heavy punishments, whereas some brutal
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 should be isolated for longer from general society.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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