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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather then buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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When it comes to housing, some
people
 regard having their own houses as an ultimate pursuit. Vital and ideal as it sounds, I personally would stand on the negative side.
Firstly
, the desire was triggered because
people
 were brainwashed by the real-estate commercials, and the concept kept being passed on from generation to generation. Construction is a big business. In order to earn more, construction companies claim that owning a personal
house
 brings happiness and keep destroying the environment to build more houses.
People
 believed the arguments, even those who don’t necessarily need their own
house
. Not only do commercials cause
people
 to compulsively want to make a big purchase
that is
 not the best option for them, but they help construction companies become richer whilst sacrificing the environment.
Moreover
, mobility could be another big issue if you don’t work at a company near your home. As you bought the
house
 sitting at a fixed spot, it could be inconvenient for you to commute to the office. Some
people
thus
rent
 a
house
 near their office,
that is
 to say, they have to pay more. Even if these homeowners don´t have to
rent
 a place, they still have to pay
transport
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 and it can translate into a big amount of money
in addition
 to a lot of time spent commuting. Only if you work near where you live, you can save on transportation money and time.
Furthermore
, it is more costly to buy rather than
rent
 , though some insist that
it
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the property will become their own when the mortgage is repaid after several decades of payments. What they didn’t fully realize are the considerable upfront down payment and the high mortgage interest rates. If you are a homeowner, you need to pay for your repairs. But if you
rent
, the landlord will pay for the repairs. In conclusion, If you don’t think about the pros and cons thoroughly, you can be making a deal with a devil. Issues
such
 as convenience and value should be taken into consideration. After all, what we need is just a place to live, which is not equal to buying one ourselves.
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