Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Few
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others believe that searching for
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a solution
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and improving the condition is far better. In
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I will discuss both perceptions and give
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a reason
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reason
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reasons
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why it is good to improve the bad circumstance. Some
people
believe that it is important to accept negative situations.
People
should be able to handle any kind of
situations
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which makes them being mentally strong .
People
can stay happy without any stress by accepting any situation.
For instance
, a person with
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unsatisfactory job and having a family of about 6 members .If he
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his
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job as he
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like it and he
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find a new one,
then
he might not be able to maintain his family well. He may not able to take care of his family and
fulfill
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their needs. It is better to accept bad circumstances, where one can stay happy and meet the needs of their family. While
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others argue that it is better to improve
bad
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situation than
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it. Because
,
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searching for a
solution
and improving things can make the conditions better.
For example
,we are working hard
for
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a project for about a month and have only a day to submit it. The project has only 90
percent
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per cent
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of accurate results and we need to work for 100
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in a day,else we might not get a good score.
Hence
, striving hard to get more accuracy than submitting it may give us good
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, as well as
self satisfaction
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. Though we feel stress, working hard for an instance gives us
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happiness of
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.
People
should always think about permanent happiness where
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we can get it only by working hard at present. Overall, I feel improvising
the
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things and searching for
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a solution
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solution
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solutions
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to a negative situation may
leads
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to satisfaction in one’s life.
People
must be creative enough in order to live their life
happy
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and comfortable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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