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Some people believe that we cannot learn anything from the past for our life today, while others believe that history is a valuable source of information to understand human life. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #life #history #source #information
I am writing
this
 letter to refer Mrs Daniel for
further
 management and
advise
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 regarding
to
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her diet management. She
is being
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is being discharged
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discharge
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 today. Mrs Daniel is a 30-year-old, woman who is 25 weeks pregnant. Upon examination, results revealed that she has induced hypertension, diabetes mellitus, palpitations, lost 8kg in weeks and her HB is low too.
Therefore
, she was commenced on hypertensive and diabetes medications.
In addition
 to that, she
loss
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 another 2kg. In terms of medical history,
initially
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 she did not have high blood pressure and diabetes mellitus till her pregnancy. Socially, she likes to eat sweets, chocolate, cookies, pudding and fruits. She does gardening and watches television. In view of the above, kindly discuss and outline a great diet programme and management which is appropriate for her. She does require to intake iron-rich food, low fat and low salt in her diet. It is worthy to note, she
also
 needs to avoid certain vegetables, fruits and starchy food. Please help to monitor her weight too.
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