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Some people think that government should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #government #ban #sports #freedom #activity
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Gandhi, and
Mother
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Teresa
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 all left an irrevocable mark on humanity. There are seven
billion
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people
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 on
this
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 planet. What if more of us gave back, even in small ways? The effect of those billions of small gestures would be astronomical. We want to find meaning in our
lives
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. Giving back and learning how to make an impact on
others
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 provides that meaning because it makes
life
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 about something much larger than ourselves. It fulfils our essential human need to feel significant as well as the human need to contribute. When we help
others
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, we grow in our personal
lives
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 and make progress toward unlocking an extraordinary
life
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. We break out of our limiting beliefs about how much good one person can actually do in the
world
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 and see
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-hand that even the smallest acts of kindness can transform
lives
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. The 5 Richest Female Entrepreneurs In The
World
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 • Gina Rinehart. Source: fortune.com Georgina Hope Rinehart, known as Gina Rinehart is a mining magnate from Australia. • Oprah Winfrey. Source: Medium.com Net worth: $3
billion
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, as of 2018. ... • Cher Wang. Net worth: $1.6
billion
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 (estimated). ... • Wang Laichun. Net worth: $1.9
billion
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, as of 2018 The Seven Greatest Humanitarians in History • The Greatest Humanitarians in History: Harriet Tubman. Harriet Tubman was an African American who overcame slavery to... • Norman Borlaug. An oft-overlooked figure, Norman Borlaug was responsible for an agricultural revolution that saved... • Great Humanitarians in History: Martin Luther King. Martin Luther King was the African American clergyman and activist. •
Mother
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Teresa
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. Born in 1910,
Mother
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Teresa
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 spent 45 years in the service of
others
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. A Roman Catholic nun,
Mother
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Teresa
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. What is
happiness
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? •
Happiness
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 comes from within. It is not outside. It is your mindset. •
Happiness
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 is state of mindfulness. It is not in abstract
world
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. It is in
mind
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 and temporary. Find joy in small things. It never comes from jobs. •
Happiness
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 is the art of never holding in your
mind
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 the memory of any unpleasant thing that has passed.” • “If you want to be happy, practice compassion. If you want to be happy, practice compassion.” ― Dalai Lama XIV, The Art of
Happiness
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 • “A disciplined
mind
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 leads to
happiness
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, and an undisciplined
mind
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 leads to suffering.” ― Dalai Lama XIV, The Art of
Happiness
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 • “If you want
happiness
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 for an hour — take a nap.' • If you want
happiness
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 for a day — go fishing. • If you want
happiness
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 for a year — inherit a fortune. • If you want
happiness
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 for a lifetime — help someone else.” • We tend to forget that
happiness
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 doesn't come
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 of getting something we don't have, but rather of recognizing and appreciating what we do have.”
Others
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 argue that
happiness
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 is a state of
mind
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, and whether you can achieve it depends entirely on the individual. Some
people
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 are never satisfied with
life
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, no matter how much they have. And you cannot tell those who suffer from depression that following a few rules will immediately solve their problems. “
Happiness
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 is the meaning and the purpose of
life
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, the whole aim and the end of human existence.” Aristotle (384 – 322BC), Greek philosopher Personal
Happiness
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 thing we notice is that
people
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 working blue-collar jobs (High rank Governments Administrator/Judges) report lower levels of overall
happiness
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 in every region around the
world
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.
People
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 around the
world
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 who categorize themselves as a manager, an executive, an official, or a professional worker evaluate the quality of their
lives
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 at a little over 6 out of 10, whereas
people
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 working in farming, fishing, or forestry evaluate their
lives
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 around 4.5 out of 10 on average. Freedom: Release yourself. “The only real prison is fear, and the only real freedom is freedom from fear
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