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As countries become more developed, many fast food outlets move into the country giving local people greater access to fast food, advantage and disadvantage:

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While rural areas used to consume more traditional
food
, the recent decades have seen a rise in the consumption rate of fast
food
 in countries.
This
 controversial issue is whether the shift of life is beneficial or not. In fact,
such
 a transition is proven to be a
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 blessing
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 is to be investigated. On the one hand, it is admittedly accurate that change has myriad merits in remote areas. In the
first
 place, the
fast
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food
 industry provides job opportunities for many people, leading to
economic
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boost
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 to shrinking areas.
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 shining example is, Mc Donald’s, you can find it all over the world, which is a restaurant chain and offers cheap fast
food
 as well as a large number of vacancies for indigenous people. So it is an affordable way to experience new or different fast
food
 choices. Indeed these should not be the
solely
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 factors taken into consideration.
On the other hand
,
such
 change equally shed light on a negative implication on society in general.
First
 and foremost society’s health is being increasingly threatened by the effect of fast
food
. The case in point is, since
such
 prepared foods contain so much unhealthy additives and artificial substances, they can impact
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the digestive system, leading to so many disorders
such
 as obesity, allergy, oedema, and bloating. There is another drawback to fast
food
, owing to the fact that encourages consumerism can be increased air pollution in the country.
Hence
, the average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future. On balance, economically auxiliary as the affordable way
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, indeed their side effects cannot be ignored. So we are to pay attention to both sides and make a balance between them.
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