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advancement in communication technology and transportation has help people to word and live anywhere. do the advantages outweigh disadvantage.

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There is no doubt that development in technology has made
easy
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it easy
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 for
people
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 for working and moving anywhere in the
world
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. Advancement in way of communication and means of
transportation
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 has added privilege in doing jobs and walk to any part of the
world
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. Despite the challenges of increased crime and
insecurities
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,
people
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 can find desired job
world
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 wild and live a lifestyle of their wish. In my opinion, using progressive means of connection and transport has far better
benefit
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benefits
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 despite many
insecurities
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. The greatest power of
information
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 technology and
transportation
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 is to be able to do business, study and shift anywhere around the
world
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, and using these facilities
people
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 are living their desired lifestyle. when there are different options are available to connect with
people
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, they will succeed
on
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in
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 their business or study the subject of their interest and connect with
company
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the company
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whoever
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whomever
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 they want to work for. If they want, they can shift easily since the progress of
transportation
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 have facilitated
people
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go
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 without any restriction. A prominent example of
this
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 is,
i
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I
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 wanted to study
in
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at
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 Colombia university,
i
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I
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 fulfilled
this
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 dream with the help of
internet
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the internet
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. I was able to apply
in
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to
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 my desired college and move and completed my education. In my view,
although
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 there are some challenges to use
this
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 technology,
this
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 offers the great opportunity to contact anywhere in the
world
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 and they can convey themselves any part of the earth.
however
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, progress in telecommunication and way of delivery
people
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 assisted many
people
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, there are some challenges
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 as increasing crime and
insecurities
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 of
life
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. Because of
availability
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the availability
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 of sim cards and effortless use of
internet
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the internet
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people
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 can achieve
information
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 of anybody and they can follow anywhere using the car, bus,
airplane
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aeroplane
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, train
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 destroying the secret of individual
life
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. For
an
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apply
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example, one of my friends
who
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apply
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lost her joy of
life
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 in a kidnapping case, criminal took her
information
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 from her public profile and followed her. Sitting in one place criminal mindset
people
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 accessing others
information
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 effortlessly.
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, the development of these
thing
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things
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 has put peoples'
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life
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lives
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 in danger.
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,
this
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 advancement has increased the
insecurities
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 level of
people
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's identity. Using these
facility
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facilities
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people
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 want to get ingrate the highest level of
life
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 opportunity but in one shot they can lose their everything when it goes to the wrong hand.
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 will certainly leave a
life
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-threatening provocation. That's why
people
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 should be careful while taking advantage of
these flourished system
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this flourished system
these flourished systems
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 In conclusion, the thrive in
these communication and
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this communication and transportation system
these communication and transportation systems
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transportation
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 system definitely has some negative part,
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,
this
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 has added a lot more value in
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life
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the life
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 of
people
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. In my opinion, the pros of
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 advancement outweigh the cons.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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