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Nowadays people are spending more time away their homes because they spend longer in their work place. Discuss advantage and disadvantage

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The issue of a balanced diet and pleasant work culture due to an unhealthy lifestyle is popular nowadays, many folks target to find balance with personal and professional lifestyles and only a few succeed in getting balanced
life
 . in the below ,paragraph we will discuss what are the causes of the problem and how to overcome
such
 problems In the era of modern development and ,technology the lifestyle of people has become very difficult as there are fewer physical activities involved
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 most of the crowd do their task sitting at the office due to which they have less physical activity involved as a development they pay less attention to health due to which they suffer from various illness.
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, due to heavy workload and high target culture in ,office most of the public have given less time to their family because of which the personal relationships
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 not maintained.
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 and if somebody works more but pays less attention to the family it can outcome in creating a disturbance in their activity .
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, folks should avoid unhealthy diet and junk food which is easily available due to which a people cannot have good energy which can
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 is better performance in a task environment, most of the public eat food available on the street which is not much expensive and
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 not better for good fitness as a reaction they may have fitness-related issues . professional
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 should have some breaks as
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 could help an individual to overcome stress
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 one should unplug himself from task stressed
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 and give some space for social
life
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 can reduce work pressure and depression related to task-
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 of that customer can be improvised . In,
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conclusion I feel one should pay equal attention to industry and personal growth as both are important for
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 individual.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional growth
  • Promotions
  • Salary increases
  • Impressive resume
  • Social interaction
  • Professional relationships
  • Support network
  • Work-life imbalance
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Strained relationships
  • Personal interests
  • Hobbies
  • Relaxation
  • Mental well-being
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