Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Others think they should begin after 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

There is an ongoing debate as to whether

children

start their formal education at a very young

age

or after 7 years old.

While

proponents of the early

age

starter argue that

children

may achieve early success in career

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the opposites claim that

children

should have

well developed

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physically before starting education.

Although

both sides make very valid points, I would argue that starting education at a very early

age

is better for most

children

.

To begin

with, it could be said that beginning

school

in advance results in time privileges for

children

.

This

way,

children

are able to be independent at a very young

age

, unlike the current

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where students are

finally

considered adults when they hit undergraduate schools in their early 20s.

Furthermore

, there is a scientific fact that actually, kids’ brains are at their best performance at the

age

3

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to 5.

This

can be

such

a good use to comprehend basic knowledge

such

as logic, reading, and writing skills

On the other hand

, in some cases, commencing

school

after 7 years old is better and easier for both schools and families as

children

are able to understand commands and will

therefore

produce better academic results. In

this

maturity stage,

children

are able to control their

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and other biological behaviour

such

as bladder control. In

this

case, studying situations are more convenient for all parties.

However

, in my opinion, the natural behaviour in

children

is trainable at a very young

age

. In fact, The

school

can be one of their training environments.

For instance

, the permission of the lavatory makes them put more consideration into going to the bathroom frequently.

Moreover

, their toddler phase will eventually pass

while

simultaneously grasping new skills at that time. In conclusion, I firmly believe that commencing

school

at a very young

age

is more beneficial to

children

due to

the possibility

to gain

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more prospects in their adult lives as they will have finished

school

earlier.

Also

, some obstacles

such

as toddlers’ natural behaviour

is able

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to be managed by

school

and family.