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Many people are now opting to provide technology companies with their personal data in exchange for access to software. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, personal
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 is being interchanged by many individuals with
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IT companies for access to
software
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.
Although
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 some
websites
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 are trustworthy and provide educational knowledge to
students
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, I believe that downside of misusing
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personal data by cybercriminal
organization
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organizations
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 outweighs the benefit. The main advantage is that many
students
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 exchange their data with educational
websites
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 to get free access to
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educational sites.
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 is to say that these academic sites help them to complete various difficult assignments and,
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 they do not need to hire a tutor.
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, by using these beneficial
websites
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,
students
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 can get more success in exams and, they
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 help them to increase their academic skills.
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, Chegg study
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free online tutoring
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 for pupils to helping them in school Homeworks through offering solutions
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 difficult questions, and it
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 provides 30 minutes of free online tutoring service.
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, I think that
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filling out their
information
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 on some
websites
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 can increase the risk of misusing them. The main disadvantage of
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 is that when people buy
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online applications, they need to fill out their personal
information
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 regarding their name,
bank
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 account and their address, which can be hacked by
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hackers.
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, some companies sell their users
information
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 to hackers to earn
money
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,
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, a huge amount of
money
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 can be stolen from user’s
bank
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 account.
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, a recent report has shown in ‘Time of America newspaper’ cyber-offenders have been stealing millions of dollars by getting the
information
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 of their
bank
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 accounts after asking them to provide their
bank
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 details if they want to win
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prize
money
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.
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, I believe that sharing data with unauthorized
websites
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 to get access to the applications may lead to a major cybercrime. In conclusion, while interchanging personal
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 with IT companies, to obtain
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software helps
students
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 to increase their intellectual skills, I believe that some hacktivists track secrete
information
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 to steal
money
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 from users.
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, in my opinion, the advantages don’t outweigh the drawbacks.

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