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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of mobey. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is undeniably true that both bad and good situations in
life
 resemble two sides of a coin, which usually runs parallel. Some individuals opine that in bad
time
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such
 as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money, the only thing one should do is to accept that
situation
.
However
, others are in favour of improving
such
 situations by trying. I strongly agree with the latter statement.
This
 essay will discuss both these views
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and
 support my opinion. On the one hand, if people accept any bad
situation
 of their
life
 whether it is undesirable
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 or lack of money, they learn to develop themselves mentally.
This
 is because when they accept the challenge, they learn to manage their emotions and finances according to the
situation
 which improves their patience and sense of satisfaction.
For instance
, a survey conducted by 'The Times' reported that 60%
humans
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 who consider it best to accept a bad
situation
 has better mental ability than those who find it hard to accept
such
situation
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.
On the other hand
, human beings can improve their hard times while giving their best efforts to tackle these challenges. Rather than only accepting any worse
situation
 and doing nothing to improve it, it will make people lazy.
Thus
, those who work hard to solve bad situations become more dedicated
towards
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 their work which is a key to success in
life
. In my opinion, one should accept any kind of
situation
 with a positive attitude of solving that problem.
This
 will reduce their stress and improve their
life
 skills of being patient and hard working. To conclude, people should keep on working hard to succeed in
life
 by accepting
life
 challenges and doing efforts to improve them.
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