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In some cpuntries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about this history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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The number of residents of some countries who are interested in studying the history of the building in which they live is increasing every
time
.
This
 essay will outline the main reasons for
people
's interest in the past of their homes and possible ways to study it. There are 2 main causes of
people
’s enthusiasm for it,
first
 is increasing attention to historical values and heritages,
second
 is increasing
value
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the value
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 of old, non-repeatable, unique objects.
Time
 by
time
, mankind is getting more intelligent and more capable to understand the significance of
the
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history.
As a result
 of
it
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people
 have got more interested in the past life of their houses, it became trendy to visit old buildings.
For instance
, a lot of
people
 wants to know about
old
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 owners of the house and construction
time
 before buying it. When everything becomes new and takes on a new look, the price and importance of old items grow and grow in accordance with their ages. Buildings that had
long
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 life and have been a place of residence
of
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 celebrities costs a lot of money. As an example,
home
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the home
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 of Elvis Presley has been sold
to
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for
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 20 million
of
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dollars.
People
 usually look for the information on the net or ask it from
people
 who lived there before them. Individuals who are interested in it can visit local historians and aged
neighbors
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. If your house is antique, you have an opportunity to advertise it and sell
for
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it for
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huge
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a huge
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 amount of money. To conclude,
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