In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way.

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try to show their
products
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new
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when they do advertising. I reckon
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it is a positive trend. In
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essay, I will provide some arguments to support my view.
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, people always love new things. When
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customers
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see
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new features added
in
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a product, they feel
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to it.
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, consumers grab the product
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.
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, “Lux” which is a well know
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, always get good sell after their advertising because they earn consumers soul by sharing their content new
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, if any businesses want to stay alive in the market, they have to
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competitive
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with other competitors.
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,
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the competitor
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competitor
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will get the market
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of you.
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why
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company
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design their
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in
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way
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in their advertisement. Despite
of
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positive trends, it
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has some demerits.
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with, it consumes
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company’s
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money. As a consequence, businesses need to spend money on
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advertising system. What is more, introducing
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in
new
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always not brings
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side, sometimes customers
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lose their interest
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the product. To conclude, without new things it is hard to get consumers attraction
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these days. So, for
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reason, I believe that it is a good thing to focus on advertising by showing
products
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are new in some
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. If
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system
work
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well,
then
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will be able to make huge money as well as brand weight.
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