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Scientists predict that all people will choose to talk the same global language in the future. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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People
 have a
language
 as a communication
media
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medium
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. There are more than 200
languages
 in the world.
Although
 local
languages
 are being used in some locations,
people
 are able to connect with
one
 global
language
.
However
, the same global
language
 has both positive and negative impacts
to
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on
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 all
cultures
. The
benifits
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benefits
 of using the global
language
 are not only
people
 easily communicate and understanding each
others
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other
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 but a lot of
resouces
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resources
 are not limited only
in
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to
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 some local areas.
For instance
, some Chinese students have taken courses out of their mainland.
Thus
, everyone uses English as the global
language
 to study.
Moreover
, every
resources
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resource
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 is provided in English.
Consequently
, all
people
 in the classes can understand and acknowledge the resources though they do not come from
same
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the same
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 countries.
On the other hand
,
one
 global
language
 may lead to less diversity of literature. The diversity of
languages
 has been raised
from
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by
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 local
people
 and it impacts
to
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the
cultures
 in each
locations
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location
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. If the local
languages
was
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 removed, the history of that places would be forgotten as well.
For example
, when European discovered the small islands, they located and grew their own culture to that place.
Hence
,
one
 day, the local
languages
 and
cultures
 were combined and replaced with
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newcomers
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new comers
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newcomers
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. The
one
language
 helps the public connects together even they
lives
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 in different places in the world.
Nevertheless
, the local
languages
 are
also
impotant
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important
 and cannot be replaced by only
one
language
. The public has to think
how
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 to maintain
diversity
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the diversity
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 of
languages
 to keep the
diversed
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diverse
literatures
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literature
kinds of literature
pieces of literature
works of literature
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 and
cultures
.
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