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In many countries legal driving age is 18 years old. Some people believe it is the right age to learn how to drive a car, whereas others say that the minimum age should be 25. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The
age
 of 18 is considered as an
age
 of getting into adulthood by most of the nations
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world wide
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, and so that at
this
age
, they could apply for a driving license after learning to drive. One group of people oppose
this
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 and suggest to give
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 permission to learn driving a car only after 25, considering various factors, which I strongly believe are highly
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. Starting driving a car at
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 early
age
 of 18 has
it’s
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 own benefits.
Firstly
, adolescents start to feel
responsibility
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 their own deeds, and that sense of realisation helps them in the process of transition to adulthood in a positive manner.
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, they no longer have to depend on a parent or other guardian to travel few miles to get
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 done, or to shop
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 essentials.
Secondly
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those who earn some bucks alongside their studies- though not so popular in some developing countries like India- could commute to the
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 on time, and
thus
 ethics of punctuality gets instilled from the tender
age
.
On the other hand
, waiting till 25 for the
first
 lesson of one of the biggest life
skill
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 is a matter of safety and protection to our younger ones. More specifically, 18 is still a
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, which is overwhelmed with all adolescent hormones that
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 innumerable problems, that make them behave immature, adventurous, angry, upset, panic, to name a few. If one of them made an accident- to exemplify- there is a tendency to hide the mistake and run away from the situation, rather than trying to sorting out the situation. In
this
 period of life, they put themselves on top of others and value their opinion rather than seeking elder’s advice, whereas
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 25, they grow up to a responsible individual and can handle most of the obstacles
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 their own. To conclude, it is not a bad idea to learn a crucial habit at 18 for
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 changing advantage, even though, I personally go with those who claim to do that 7 years later because of the maturity that would be gained over time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Driving age
  • Legal driving age
  • Minimum age
  • Independence
  • Personal growth
  • Responsibility
  • Transition
  • Reaction times
  • Adaptability
  • Maturity
  • Risk understanding
  • Financial stability
  • Road accidents
  • Risky behaviors
  • Young drivers
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