Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Environment
plays a key role in the world. Because, protecting
environment
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can save many lives
such
as
plants
,
animals
and human beings. Few
people
believe that
extinction
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the extinction
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of
plants
and
animals
is the major problem in today’s world. While
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others say that there are many other drawbacks
which
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that
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are more important than
loss
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the loss
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of species.In
this
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I will discuss both perceptions and discuss
about
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major
problems
of loss of
environment
.
Firstly
, some
people
say that due to the decrease in
plants
as well as
animals
we are facing environmental
problems
. Cutting of
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trees
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tress
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trees
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leads to all these
problems
.
For example
,
people
usually cut
trees
for many purposes,
such
as making
of
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paper. But they do not reuse or recycle the paper most of
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times
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, which causes more cutting of
trees
.If there are no
trees
it may affect the
animals
and humans.They don’t find food and oxygen in
this
case.
On the other hand
, few
people
say that there are many other major
problems
which have
negative
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a negative
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impact on
environment
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the environment
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.
For instance
, pollution is the most dangerous problem which may harm living species. Due to
increase
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in
vehicles
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there is
large
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amount of CO2 emission.
Plants
intake carbon dioxide and
produces
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oxygen.
Bu
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,due to
decrease
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a decrease
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in
plants
and
increase
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an increase
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in pollutants there is less O2 available.
This
might lead to
people
’s death. Henceforth, I feel pollution is the most dangerous thing than
loss
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the loss
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of
animals
. If there is
a
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control
in
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pollution, humans will be lead a healthier life. So, they can plant more
trees
which
intrun
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in turn
intr-un
results in
a
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ecofriendly
environment
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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