Some people think that children should begin their formal education at every early age. Some think they should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

today , many people are involving in their
children
and they believed that
children
should begin their
education
sooner but others suggest it is not standard they should start at seven age.
This
essay will present both different issues. In the contemporary , beginning sooner for
education
can help
children
and parents.
Firstly
,according to researchers scientists announce that the best
alsothe
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also the
most affect the ages periods are approximately between 2 and 6 years old  and these can be the best method bring up for
education
and growth in the school that  can be brought up the better brain,
Secondly
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if
children
separate from their parents, they will be strong people ,
also
they can be independent more than in past
also
, they can manage alone their future that they will be useful .
On the other hand
, many people opposite
this
scheme and they believe that start sooner for
education
, can be injured themselves ,
for instance
, compulsory training can appear problems metals
such
as anxiety, depression and being deprived in
time
for playing or entertaining, it can be raised  dropped out and the class atmosphere will be been dull ,
also
their future can be lost motive for continuing in school and they should not
lost
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lose
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free
time
that's why having free brain can be calm down for exercising
time
and not having problem mental will be gotten successful their study
besidestheir
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besides their
beside their
family. to sum up, start to training sooner can be arrived at their destination of the target even they will be intelligent in their future but having a free
time
for
children
is right for every child and should not be deprived in  their authority about 
time
and favourite issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • social development
  • structured learning environments
  • essential skills
  • reading, writing, and arithmetic
  • social norms
  • undue stress and pressure
  • natural curiosity and creativity
  • unstructured play
  • emotional and psychological development
  • mature
  • rigors of formal education
  • natural developmental timeline
  • life skills
  • decision-making
  • problem-solving
  • informal learning
  • structured educational system
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