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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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Environment
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 plays a key role in the world. Because, protecting the
environment
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 can save many lives
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 as
plants
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, creatures and human beings. Few
people
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 believe that the extinction of
plants
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 and animals is a major problem in today’s world. While others say that, there are myriad flaws that are considered to be more important than the loss of species. In
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 essay, I will discuss both perceptions and discuss major complications of the loss of the
environment
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Firstly
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, some
people
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 say that due to the decrease in
plants
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 as well as creatures we are facing environmental issues. Cutting down the
trees
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 leads to all these problems.
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,
people
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 usually cut
trees
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 for many purposes,
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 as making paper and for wood(shelter and fire).
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, they do not reuse or recycle paper most of the time.
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,
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 leads to massive cutting of the
trees
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 which causes deforestation.
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, If there are no
trees
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 it may affect the animals and humans, as they don’t find food and oxygen in
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 case.
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, few
people
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 say that there are many other major problems which have a negative impact on the
environment
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.
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, pollution is considered to be the most dangerous problem which may harm a variety of living species. Else,
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 can lead to the extinction of species. Due to the increase in
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vehicles
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 there is a large amount of CO2 emission into the air.
Plants
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 intake carbon dioxide and produce oxygen. But, due to a significant decrease in
plants
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 and an increase in
pollutants
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 there is less O2 available.
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 might lead to
people
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’s death.
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, I feel pollution is a most dangerous thing than the loss of creatures. If there is control over pollution, human beings can lead healthier lives. So, they can plant more
trees
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 which in turn results in an ecofriendly
environment
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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