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Some people spend a lot of money for their wedding ceremonies. However, others feel like it is unnecessary to spend a lot. Discuss both view points and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays few individuals do more expenditure on their family functions, while , others think that it is
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wastage of
money
. I will discuss both sides along with my opinion in
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 paragraphs. On the one side,
people
who
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utilize their wealth
on
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 wedding parties because they wanted to prove their status high in
society
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the society
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 in which they live and just for show off purpose.
Secondly
, rich
people
 have enough
money
 they spend
lot
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a lot
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 on special occasions in their family to
fulfill
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 the fonds of their children, while poor
people
 spend more so that their children can stay happy with their
in- laws
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.
Also
 , it
traditional
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 in many places to give expensive gifts ,
wedding
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a wedding
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 in
standard
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the standard
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 hall which takes lakhs rupees, so few
people
 are just forced to do
this
. On the other side,
people
 who think
thatand
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that and
that
 according to my point of view , it is
notmandatory
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not mandatory
 to do
lot
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 of expenditure on ceremony, because
this
money
 can
be utilize
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 for
other purpose
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another purpose
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such
 as to provide education to poor
people
 and for charity.
Moreover
, if they save
money
, it can be used in their bad time ,like
people
 can take better health facilities.
Also
 , individuals take loans from banks for weddings which enhance the stress level of
family
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the family
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, decrease expenses not only reduce their worries
,
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but
also
 make their life more easy and smooth.
In addition
 to
this
, one can help needy
people
. To conclude,
although
,
people
 spend more
money
 on their family occasions for enjoyment, I believe that,
this
money
 can be utilized for donations and giving teaching to
low class
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 children.
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