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Many people believe that living in a city life offers greater benefits as compared to country side. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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The idea of urban
life
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 offering more
benefits
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 than
rural
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area
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 is widely debated with many people claiming that the former makes
life
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 more mechanical and monotonous. As
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 there are merits for both ways of living
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 the
one
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 in city outweighs the other. There is a myriad of arguments in
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 of my stance, the most preponderant
one
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 being the comfort of living. Staying in a city not only contribute ease of access to amenities, like grocery as well as clothing, and opens doors of advanced modes of education, but
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 leads to numerous other
benefits
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 in various fields.
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super-specialty
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 hospitals are
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with in
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 reach to provide timely excellent medical care which is
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vital in saving lives. To
site
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 an example, large shopping malls, which are a landmark of town s, makes it easy for an individual to get all that he wants without wandering much. Needless to
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 all the
benefits
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 stand the people in good stead as their augmenting prosperity and excellence is concerned. Probing
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, with the
fast growing
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 population, finding space to accommodate each family has become a hurdle
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 the way of development.
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 issue is well tackled in cities with the help of flats.
Foe
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 instance a 5 storied flat enables the accommodation of at least 15 families on an average,
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with in
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 the floor space of
one
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 building.
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 staying in
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 buildings ensures security
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.
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 it is apparent that why many are in
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 of
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life
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 in urban areas .
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, despite the
benefits
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 of metropolitan
life
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 , there is a minor advantage to rural
life
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 which is less pollution.
Country sides
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 have plenty of trees and the number of private vehicles
are
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 comparatively low. Because of
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this
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 the rate of pollution is much lesser.
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 it goes without saying that why it is accepted by some. From what has been discussed above
one
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 can conclude that ease of living and space to live are important and too great to ignore
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 as per the
benefits
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 of
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life
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 in village areas.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan
  • amenities
  • congestion
  • rural
  • serenity
  • sustainable living
  • commute
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • tranquility
  • pros and cons
  • lifestyle
  • work-life balance
  • wellbeing
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