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Nuclear energy is a better choice for meeting increasing demand. Do you agree or disagree?

#energy #choice #demand
Nuclear
energy
, as we all know, is the
energy
that is
 induced from the nuclear
source
. Many kinds of nuclear reactions are nuclear fission, nuclear fusion, and a lot more. The current
energy
 sources that we use are either polluting the environment or causing a threat to humanity. When joined these two together, doesn’t a beautiful question strike out mind – Can nuclear
energy
 be the replacement
source
. “Why not?” will be my answer to
this
. And the reasons for my answer are very simple which all of us would definitely have thought at some point
of
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 time. Nuclear
energy
 is nothing but the
energy
 that we get due to nuclear reactions. All that we are going to do to produce
this
energy
 is bombard 2 atoms and produce the
energy
that is
 needed for us to perform the usual activities.
Although
this
 sounds a little complicated, we do have many science scholars who can help us perform it accurately. Science has always proven to give a hand in the improvement of any field. It will definitely be a great hand for bringing the new
source
 of
energy
. When a nuclear
power
 plant is placed in close propinquity, there are chances that it could damage the areas surrounding it and
also
 cause problems to human lives. There have been many cases where the people living in the areas nearby are affected with some diseases because of the reactions that happen in the
power
 plant. But as we know, there is no rose without a thorn. Everything has its own advantages and disadvantages, some have solutions
also
. If the nuclear
power
 plant is located somewhere far from the locality, in a deserted place.
This
 could be in
favor
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 of extracting
energy
 from nuclear sources.
Thus
 I would like to conclude by telling that Nuclear
power
 could be a better replacement for the current
source
 that we are using. It could help us provide a better environment and a peaceful place for us, as well as the future generations to live in. Our world has tried so many things that have failed,
this
try
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 might not be one among them if we try it in a proper way.
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