The planet's population is reaching unsustainable levels, and people are facing shortage of resources like water, food and fuel. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinion, what measures can be taken to fight overpopulation?

Overpopulation
has a pretty strong impact on
planet
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and
concern
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many areas of our life. So,
this
phenomenon is believed
one
of the serious global problems of our time, which should be considered, and steps should be taken by
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significant population growth. Depletion of natural
resources
and increase in mortality are some consequences, which can happen due to
overpopulation
.
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of water and food is limited,
therefore
the more
people
on our planet, the
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resources
everyone can get.
Furthermore
, because of
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rise, a large number of trees are cut down and reckless animal hunting
occur
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. As for
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rate, it will rise substantially in the near future, especially in poor countries. In conditions of limited
resources
,
people
will have to fight for them and the losers will starve to death.
Thus
, if
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increases above the permissible, it will lead to
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outcome
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. Personally, I think that there are possible measures, which can help to solve
this
actual issue: government birth control and education.
One
of the
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to prevent
further
exacerbation of the problem can be government intervention. They can develop various policies, which connect with tax incentives, thereby encouraging families with no more than two children.
One
more step for mitigation of the situation is raising awareness on
this
topic.
People
should know about how
overpopulation
affects the world and what disastrous consequences will be led by irresponsible
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to
this
problem. All these measures can give some positive results concerning
this
issue. In conclusion,
overpopulation
of the planet is
one
of the types of demographic crisis, which can lead to
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of natural
resources
and
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considerable growth of death.
However
, political programs for birth control and
people
education on
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level can be great steps to eradicate
this
problem.
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