Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Most individuals think that modern

music

can have

negative

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impact

youngsters

, while others think it provides

positive

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a positive

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impact

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them. To my opinion, Modern

music

only brings

negative

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a negative

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impact

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today's

todays

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youngsters

, because, most

music

has no social values and

causes

ill-effects

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ill effects

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to them and their

community

People

who believe that modern

music

provides them positive

impact

doesn'

realize that

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music

is rhythm, which should provide

good

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message and peace of mind. Comparing to older

songs

modern

songs

have too

much

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instrument noises, which is

also

in high pitch. Recent

songs

has

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less

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words, most of the words are not clear in pronunciation,

therefore

it doesn'

provide any value to the listeners.

People

argue that the tunes present in the

music

gives

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then

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peace

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of mind while listening, which is a valid point, but, there are only

few

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songs

has

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been released like

such

in recent times. Considering

these modern

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music

can'

provide any positive

impact

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today's

todays

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youngsters

. When it comes to

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negative

impact

, modern

music

causes

more bad effects to the young generations and

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their

community

Recent

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generation

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generations

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people

prefer to hear

songs

using

headphone

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instrument makes noises closer to the ears. When

music

has high pitch noise heard in

such

manner

causes

ear failure, due to

this

people

will become deaf sooner.

Todays

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music

is causing more anger and rage in

youngsters

, because, the high instrument noises

causes

them to do more aggressive things.

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kind of

behavior

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causes

unnecessary problems to their surroundings and their

community

therefore

modern

music

only

provide

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negative

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a negative

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impact

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this

society. In conclusion, Modern

music

isn'

like old

music

which

provide

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social

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message and

pleasant

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to hear. It only

causes

ill-effects on

youngsters

and

make

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them

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act aggressively while hearing them,

this

eventually

cause

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bad situations to them and make a bad impression

over

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them in

this

community

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