Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

Most individuals think that modern
music
can have
negative
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impact
on
youngsters
, while others think it provides
positive
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impact
to
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them. To my opinion, Modern
music
only brings
negative
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a negative
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impact
to
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today's
todays
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youngsters
, because, most
music
has no social values and
causes
ill-effects
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ill effects
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to them and their
community
.
People
who believe that modern
music
provides them positive
impact
doesn'
t
realize that
,
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music
is rhythm, which should provide
good
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message and peace of mind. Comparing to older
songs
modern
songs
have too
much
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instrument noises, which is
also
in high pitch. Recent
songs
has
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less
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words, most of the words are not clear in pronunciation,
therefore
it doesn'
t
provide any value to the listeners.
People
argue that the tunes present in the
music
gives
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then
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peace
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of mind while listening, which is a valid point, but, there are only
few
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songs
has
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been released like
such
in recent times. Considering
these modern
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music
can'
t
provide any positive
impact
to
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today's
todays
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. When it comes to
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negative
impact
, modern
music
causes
more bad effects to the young generations and
to
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their
community
.
Recent
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generation
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people
prefer to hear
songs
using
headphone
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,
this
instrument makes noises closer to the ears. When
music
has high pitch noise heard in
such
manner
causes
ear failure, due to
this
people
will become deaf sooner.
Todays
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music
is causing more anger and rage in
youngsters
, because, the high instrument noises
causes
them to do more aggressive things.
This
kind of
behavior
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causes
unnecessary problems to their surroundings and their
community
,
therefore
modern
music
only
provide
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negative
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a negative
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impact
to
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this
society. In conclusion, Modern
music
isn'
t
like old
music
which
provide
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social
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a social
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message and
pleasant
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to hear. It only
causes
ill-effects on
youngsters
and
make
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them
to
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act aggressively while hearing them,
this
eventually
cause
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causes
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bad situations to them and make a bad impression
over
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them in
this
community
.
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