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Some people argue that working in a large company is important, others however give preferance to work in a small company.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #company #preferance #work
With reference to above debate that
people
 usually have on woking in
large
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a large
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 organisation is better doing
work
 in small
firms
 is better.
Lot
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A lot
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 of persons have
lot
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a lot
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 of queries on
this
that
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apply
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which
company
 is better to
work
 for
their
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in their
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 future. We will conclude
this
 as below:- Some
people
loves
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love
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 to
work
 in large
cpmpanies
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companies
 due to their
work
 culture,high salary packages,
highre
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higher
high
performance linked
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performance-linked
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 pay system,outstanding
Infrastrutue
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Infrastructure
 and bonuses which the employees get is awesome. With reference to bonuses,
i
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I
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 want to share the benefit of
bonus
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the bonus
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 that my friend got who is working in a
Muti
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Multi
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 National
Company
. He almost got Rs 1 Lakh bonus in his 2 years experience in the
company
 which is huge
i
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I
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 think.
Person
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A person
The person
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 who worked in
such
 companies always
get
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gets
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 higher pay packages in other companies
beacuse
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because
 of their
expericnce
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experience
 if they want to switch to other
company
.
Promtion
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Promotion
 in
such
comapnies
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companies
 are usually done in a short span.
Their
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There
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 is no doubt
people
also
loves
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love
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 to
work
 in smaller
firms
.
Usually
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,Usually
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smalle
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small
smaller
firms
 recruit from institutions or employment generations fairs. New employees Adjust
in
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to
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Working
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the Working
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 culture of the industry better in smaller
firms
 than
Larger
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larger
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firms
. Employees can give more time to their families due to
less
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fewer
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 working hours.Some
people
 love challenges in their
work
 and for those
people
 working in small companies give them
opportunity
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the opportunity
an opportunity
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 to prove themselves by getting better business deals in which
their
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there
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 is huge competition in the industry due to huge MNC's.
This
 is always a challenging question if one ask
that
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apply
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which
company
 is better large or small
organisaions
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organisations
. I would like to say that working in
large
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a large
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 organisation is better which is explained above.
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