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With the increasing use and development of new technology, many machines are now able to do the work which people used to perform. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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It is undeniable that
technology
 has taken over the world. Thanks to the rapid development of modern
technology
, many
machines
 have proven to achieve better performance results than workers can. For me,
this
 trend does offer both benefits and drawbacks and, in
this
 essay, I will support my opinion with relevant examples. On the one hand,
technology
 is usually reliable and can complete complicated and boring tasks that humans do not want to. What I mean is that computers are able to process millions of calculations in a short
time
 – for faster than the human brain ever could, so they are always trusted in managing sophisticated systems
such
 as a city’s traffic lights, ensuring the flow of traffic to be in sync.
In addition
, factories use automated
machines
 in the majority of the production lines which helps them to save
time
 in manufacturing. The reason for
this
 usage is because
machines
 do not require a break and can function for long hours. At the same
time
, in many households, it is common for electronic gadgets
such
 as washing
machines
 or vacuum cleaning robots to assist housewives with doing many day-to-day dull chores. The
time
 freed from those duties can,
thus
, be better spent on their family and friends.
On the other hand
, there are a variety of disadvantages of
technology
 taking over human duties. It is obvious that the appearance of modern
machines
 has caused high unemployment rates. As a large number of works is done through the computerized system, people are no longer hired by the companies. What’s more, if humans control robots in the wrong ways and let them upgrade by themselves, it would be a disaster as robots may dominate the world someday. In conclusion,
although
 there is a wide range of drawbacks of modern
machines
, I believe that their benefits are far more significant.
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