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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

#year #crime #rate #increases #rise #activity
In recent years, the percentage of
crime
rate
 has been increased due to several
reasons
.
However
,
in
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the following paragraphs will
discussed
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 the causes and how to overcome these
reasons
 and find the most effective ways to reduce
this
rate
.
To begin
 with, it is commonly believed that using
drugs
 and narcotic substances will lead to
development
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 and increase the
rate
 of
crime
 because
,
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 these people who used
drugs
 frequently or
addictive
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 people
they
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are not truly conscious.
For example
, the addictive person may make lots of crimes to get extra money to be able to buy more
drugs
.
Although
, we live in an age when many of us are believe that the
criminal
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 scene in lots of
movies
 will encourage and contribute
in
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 raising the criminal
rate
. The younger generation
start
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 to imitate what they see in these
movies
.
Also
, they try to act like the actor and simulate these action scenes
on
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 reality. Some scenarios of these
movies
 describe the culprit as a victim and give so many
reasons
 to gain
the
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empathy from audiences.
As a result
, we need to find solutions to overcome
this
 increasing
of
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crime
rate
. One of these strategies
are
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we
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need to control and prevent using
for
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drugs
 and narcotics material to eliminate the main reason
of
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 rising the
rate
 of
crime
.
In addition
, we should monitor what our children see and we need to make an effective discussion with them to illustrate and explain that , there is no excuse to do
crime
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. To conclude, after
analysis
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 both
reasons
 and some effective solutions to reduce the
rate
 of
crime
 we can say that we need to restrict and prohibit using of
drugs
 to reduce
crime
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rate
 and we should make an effective discussion with our children and monitor what they see in the
movies
.
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