Some people say that parents should decide on what kind of medical care their children should receive, while others believe that this is the state’s responsibility Discuss both views and give your opinion

These days, abundant knowledge about medicine is able to be easily accessed via the internet, which many

parents

take it to

initially

treat their

pupils

, when getting sick, whereas, others argue that it is better to take children to see the person, who is an expert in a medical

care

, a

doctor

at hospitals. In

this

essay, I will explore both

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viewpoints, which I strongly admit that taking

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medical

care

by a

doctor

should be encouraged due to accuracy for diagnosis, and the proper

care

for particular cases. On the one hand, children

is

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considered as the heart of every

parents

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, who love and

care

them the most, so

parent

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will search for the best things for their

pupils

even in medical

care

.

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,

many

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useful information is available on the internet, which

parents

can learn and treat the proper methods for providing

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medical

care

to their

pupils

.

For example

, my

parents

searched for

the

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way to alleviate my headache on google, and buy

a

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medicine from

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store for me, which

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was work

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. Due to

this

,

myriad

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amount of budget for the hospital service was saved.

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,

many

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information associated with health

care

is unreliable on the internet, which can be disastrous for someones who follow the wrong procedures.

Therefore

, seeing the

doctor

when your kids get

illness

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is the best action because a

doctor

is

the

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person who

have

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a medical background, and

experiences

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to heal numerous patients. For

this

reason, your

pupils

will be treated with

the

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precise treatment.

For example

, my toothache was healed within 2 days by the medicine given by the

doctor

, while a week before seeing the

doctor

, my

parents

had given me pills but it

wasn't work

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.

Therefore

, whenever your kids

gets

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sick,

parents

should take them to

hospital

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immediately. In conclusion,

although

parents

are the person who

love

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and

care

their

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pupils

the most, they should not medically treat their kids by themselves due to

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of mistakes.

Furthermore

, medical treatments for children should be implemented by

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expert, who

have

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a knowledge

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and experience in curing.